Question

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Oscar grew up in a small province called Paramonga. When He was 10 years old he moved to the city of Lima leaving his friends to start a new life. After the move, Oscar was determined to get along with the kids in his class but they weren't very friendly whit him. But he was determined not to give up. One day a new girl had moved to her neighborhood, so her parents went to receive them, at that time Oscar knew Karen who was his same age and also would go to his same class, at first he was very shy because he was afraid of being rejected again, but she approached and asked him to be his friend and he accepted. They grew up together going unforgettable moments. When they were in fifth grade of secondary, Oscar asked Karen to be his girlfriend and she didn't accept him for fear of losing him forever. Oscar became very sad and decided to return to Paramonga with his grandmother

Answer 1

when he was son dos auxiliares diferentes esta mal esa parte

Answer 2

They weren't very friendly to him. However, he didn't give up.

...her parents went to welcome them. At that time Oscar met Karen, who had the same age and also attended the same class as him...

They grew up leaving unforgettable moments.

El resto está bien. ¡Felicidades!