Question

Hola alguien me ayuda a saber si mi writing esta bien escrito porfa, si van a comentar gracias por el punto o esas cosas mejor no lo hagan
I was anxiously waiting the big party to find my wife. The day of the party many women came. Nobody liked me. I was waiting for someone beautiful and nice. When I was bored, I saw someone walking very fast, I followed her and saw that she was a beautiful girl. We were dancing very happily. We walked and fell in love. When the twelve o'clock bell rang, she was scared and started running. I was confused and ran with her quickly. When I was going down the stairs, I saw that her glass slipper fell off. That was the only thing I kept of her. I was waiting for her and finally found her thanks to her glass slipper.

Answer 1

Respuesta:

Is right

Explicación:

mi único comentario es hacerlo conectado, usa más el then (luego), few moments later ( pocos momentos después), later, etc